First draft feedback

 We Presented our first draft to a group of Media students and gave them a sheet to fill out with certain questions on and here are some of the responses that we got:

Is it obviously an opening sequence?
All of the comments we got said that it was very clear that it was an opening sequence.

Is it clear who the target audience is?
On this question we had a mixed response some people though that it was really clear who the target audience was but others thought that it wasn't very clear. So to make this better we will have to add some hints so they know who the target audience is.

Titles go with the genre. Is the genre obvious? Are they clear? Are there enough and are they in the right order?
Most of the viewers found that the titles really fitted with the film and that the transitions between each title was really good. However a couple of people thought that the titles were too simple and that they were in the wrong order.

Think about the sound and the images are they appropriate? Do they fit together?
We got a good response with the sound of the opening, everyone thought that the song really fitted with the whole mood and the emotional side of the film and the storyline and that they automatically feel sorry for Jack.

Camera- Are the shots appropriate and relevant? Is there controlled use of camera attention to framing, variety of shot distance and angle? Close attention use of mise en scene?
The audience felt that the shots that we chose were very good and very effective at introducing the characters and setting the whole theme of the film. But a few people felt that even though the shots were very effective that we needed to have some more variety of certain shots that we use.

Editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer and making selective and appropriate use of shot transition and other effects.
The people that we asked thought that the editing was excellent and they really liked the whole mirror effect to show the differences between the two characters. They also thought that the opening flowed really well and that the transitions between each scene was very clever and worked really well.

Total Score
Taking an average out of the 22 people that we asked the score that we got was:
47.3

Improvements
To improve our first draft we will need to finish filming all the shots especially the last shot needed which will sort out any confusion about what the film is about and the whole boxing theme to it. We will also need to change the order of the titles to make it more professional and to cut certain scenes like the chase scene so there is less time for the audience to wait from one scene to the next.